Question

Instructions: Rewrite the sentences below. Follow the examples to make each of the sentences clear. The object is to take out the words that are not concrete, and replace them with words that are concrete but mean the same thing. This can require a bit of imagination, since these examples, pulled from local printed material, are not always clear. In other words, since the meaning is difficult to deduce, you may have to invent your own meaning in order to make them clearer Example 1 “There’s lots of ways for us to put input into the process.” Better: “We are welcoming comments from the public on our website, on a new phone line, and through the mail.” Example 2 “We help the community and the world by producing state-of-the-art business solutions.” Better: “The Silicon Electronics Research Laboratory is responsible for advanced R&D on integrated circuits including materials, process, device, and circuit research.”

1. Streamlining the check request system will have a strong positive impact on the organization.

2. Intertek International designs proactive enterprise-wide organizational solutions.

3. We are very excited that the utilization of the mentor program has improved responses on a personal basis.

4. Engineering should focus on product enhancement and refocus their take on the company’s mission.

5. The remuneration issue has obfuscated the program’s vision.

6. If our department had more personal interaction with students, we would be able to further our goal of informing them of their scholarship opportunities.

7. None of our departments have yet connected effectively in regards to the list of priorities.

8. Communication is increasingly carried out graphically and orally.

9. The article provided me with an opportunity to step back for a few minutes and consider whether or not my effort to preserve and protect the future of agriculture in my country is an exercise in futility.

10. We are not abstractly dropping math into children’s heads.

Answer 1

1. The check request system needs to be streamlined as that will bring a strong positive impact on the organization.

2. Intertek International designs has a strong faith in enterprise-wide organizational solutions which they show in their approach as well.

3. Its’ been a great news to share that that the utilization of the mentor program has improved responses on a personal basis.

4. The focus of engineering should be on product enhancement, whereas it can refocus on the company’s mission.

5. Program’s vision is very much important, and it should not be affected by the remuneration issue.

6. Personal interaction is always a key aspect, and if our department can establish that with students, our goal to inform them about scholarship opportunities would be effectively fulfilled.

7. A sync between the departments and their priorities should be there, which is missing at this moment.

8. Graphs and oral communication is getting a very wide acceptance now.

9. Going through the article made me realize whether I am doing any good by putting my efforts to preserve and protect the future of agriculture in my country.

10. Math is very much an integral part of studies and we are not doing taking it out of the syllabus.