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Dear Mr. Hansford,

There is a favorite place in which Manchester students study on our campus: the library because of the quiet atmosphere excellent resources, and helpful staff. With a ajustment in library hours there assets could be taken advantage of by more students.

In an informal survey of the students in my English class, a desire for the library to be open more hours on the weekends became evident. Many students find weekends best for researching term papers: because that’s when large blocks of time can be found in their schedules.

I’d like to sight several reasons for the change I am about to propose to encourage your interest and desire for my suggestion. Understandable, librarians need a day off. Perhaps students and librarians could both be accomodated if the library closed at five p.m. on Friday night. Friday night is the time most students like to relax and attend sports events or parties. The libary could then be open on Saturdays from ten a.m. until 4:30 p.m. To make this arrangement fair to librarians; perhaps their schedules could be staggered so that nobody would have to work every Saturday or those scheduled to work on Saturdays could be given Mondays or Fridays off.

Consider implementing this new schedule this Fall. Another much-appreciated service for students will be performed if you do this.

Sincerely:

Steve Pendergrass, student

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Dear Mr. Hansford,

Our Campus’s library is the favorite place for studying and research because of its quiet atmosphere, excellent resources, and helpful staff. With an adjustment in library hours these assets can be used more resourcefully.

I’d like to cite several reasons for the change.

1. In an informal survey of the students in my English class indicated a desire to increase the time period for which the library remains open.
2. Majority of the students find weekends best for researching term papers as weekends provide sufficient time for research work.

There can be a resistance from the librarians to the change in working days and disturbance in the week offs. However, interests of both students and librarians could be accommodated by closing the library at five p.m. on Friday night. Friday night is the time most students like to relax and engage in leisure activities. The library could then be open on Saturdays from 10:00 AM until 4:30 PM. A rotational schedule can be made for librarians to accommodate their Saturday off.

It will be so kind if you consider implementing this new schedule this fall.

Sincerely,

Steve Pendergrass, Student

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