Question

Revise the following sentences to emphasize the perspective of the audience and the “you” attitude

1. I give my permission for you to attend the two-day workshop.

2. So that we may bring our customer records up to date and eliminate the expense of duplicate

mailings, we are asking you to complete the enclosed cards.

3. We are requesting all employees to complete the enclosed questionnaire so that we may

develop a master schedule for summer vacations.

4. I think my background and my education match the description of the manager trainee position

you advertised.

5. We are pleased to announce that we have selected you to join our management trainee

program.

Answer 1

Revised sentences after emphasizing the perspective of the audience and the "you" attitude are as follows:

1. You are requested to attend the two-day workshop. It will enhance your knowledge and exposure on the subject.

2. You are requested to complete the enclosed cards, as this will result in your contribution in remaining upto date with customer's records and avoiding duplicate mailings.

3. You are requested to complete the enclosed questionnaire so that master schedule for your summer vacations can be developed.

4. I can help you with filling your manager trainee position as the description provided by you in advertisement matches with my background and education.

5. You are informed that you have been selected to join our management trainee program.