Question

E-mail Message –

ROUGH DRAFT

DATE: March 28, 2019

TO: Jean Miller, President

SUBJECT:

(1) An increase in workers’ compensation (WC) insurance premiums has been observed in our company over the past 12 months. (2) In addition, a higher number of sick days have been taken this year. (3) On March 1 you asked me to research some options to reduce WC claims and ameliorate the health of our employees.

(4) As a result, I am reccomending that we introduce an employee fitness program in several stages. (5) With a fitness program, we can ensure the health and safety of every employee. (6) I offer my full and complete support with implimenting this program. (7) Please don’t hesitate to contact me as soon as possible if I can help you with anything else.

(8) According to researchers, workplace health and fitness are important for many reasons. (9) For example, if employees will exercise regularly, they will improve their fitness level and reduce their stress levels. (10) Therefore, our company can save money by preventing employee sick days.

(11) Many details about the new program are in the attachment, “Program Details.” (12) It is a practical resource with options for creating effective fitness programs. (13) It can also be used to design a timeline for each stage of the program.

A. Writing Tasks (5 points each)

1. Your rough draft is missing a subject line. Write an effective subject line that is appropriate for the Scenario described above.

2. Evaluate the first sentence of your rough draft. If this is effective, write “Correct.” If not, create an appropriate first sentence.

3. Your rough draft is missing a goodwill close. Write an effective goodwill close that is appropriate for the Scenario described above.

B. Multiple Choice Questions (2 points each)

4. How many misspelled words does your rough draft contain? a. 0 b. 1 c. 2 d. 3

5. How many examples of passive voice does your rough draft contain? a. 0 b. 1 c. 2 d. 3

6. How many state-of-being verbs does your rough draft contain? a. 0 b. 1 c. 2 d. 3

7. Which sentence contains an expletive? a. Sentence 12 b. Sentence 13 c. (both a and b above) d. (none of the above)

8. Which sentence contains a cliché? a. Sentence 3 b. Sentence 7 c. Sentence 11 d. (none of the above)

9. Which sentence contains a pair of words that are redundant? a. Sentence 2 b. Sentence 4 c. Sentence 6 d. (none of the above)

10. Which sentence uses formal wording? a. Sentence 2 b. Sentence 3 c. Sentence 10 d. (none of the above)

Answer 1

Answer:-

Answer-1: Subject Line:- 'Employee Productivity, Health and Wellbeing" - In the scenario, employee productivity is going down due to health and if their wellbeing is not taken in priority it would be not good for not only employee but organisation too.

Answer-2:- It is not Correct. 'In a year, worker compensation insurance premium has increased'

Answer-3:- Employee productivity is directly related to their health, better employee health will increase employee's productivity thereby overall productivity of organisation.

Answer-4:- It is 1. The sentence-6 has misspelled word 'implementing' written as 'implimenting'

Answer-5:- It is 4. Sentences - 3,4,8 and 7.

Answer-6:- It is 4. The state of being verbs found:- are am, are, be, been

Answer-7:- Option-c: both a and b.

Answer-8:- Option b - Sentence 7 contains a cliche.