Question

Style Lesson #1 Reducing Wordiness. Technical and scientific writing : Rewrite each sentence below to eliminate wordiness

1. As far as artificial intelligence is concerned, the technology is only in its infancy.
2. There is a real possibility of issues and problems happening throughout the duration of the project’s projected timeframe.
3. In trauma victims, breathing is restored by artificial respiration. Techniques of artificial respiration include mouth-to-mouth respiration and mouth-to-nose respiration.
4. My recommendation is for a larger budget to be put in place.
5. At the present time it is very important that every single manager submit his division’s budget to the unit head before the deadline that was set by the unit head.
6. In the event of a system failure, your sounding of the alarm is essential.
7. Due to the fact that a power surge occurred, all of the computers malfunctioned and left us without computers.
8. We feel it necessary to apologize for our inadvertent error in detailing the particulars of our final report conclusions.
9. The specialty coating that covers the part provides coverage and protection against rust.
10. I suppose I could find it within my ability to undertake your project on this very day even though my schedule of this day is really quite busy.

Answer 1

The technogy for Artificial Intelligence is still in infancy stage.

Projects projected timeframe has real possibilities of issues and problems.

Trauma victims' breathing is restored by artificial respiration, which includes mouth-to-mouth respiration and mouth-to-nose respiration.

I recommend for a larger budget.

At present, each manager is required to submit his division’s budget to the unit head before the deadline set by him.

In the event of a system failure, your sounding of the alarm is essential.

A power surge malfunctioned all the computers and left us with none of them.

We feel it is necessary to apologize for our inadvertent errors caused in final report conclusions.

The special coating that covers the part provides coverage and protection against rust.

Even if that day's schedule is busy, I could do this project within my ability.